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Brulafi wrote:

How can I fix this sentence:

"The picturesque rocky beaches and dramatic hills dividing the idyllic mining town of Budakraj from the shores of the Lake are a well-kept secret gem to the locals, with activities like cliff-diving and overnight camping popular among the population."

If you’ll allow me, this is how I would fix it. Although it changes, adds, and/or removes a lot of the words and structure:

“Rocky beaches and dramatic hills separate the mining town of Budakraj from the lake. These beaches and hills are well-kept secrets to the locals, hosting popular activities like cliff-diving and camping.”

Of course you can take it, leave it, or alter it :)